Raoul Teacher's Writing Support {175}
인터넷보급에의한 영향을 주제로 쓴 수필이라고 하겠는데.....
그냥 생각대로쓴거라서 막 틀렸을꺼에요 ...
틀린이유를 꼭 써주셨으면 합니다.!
influence of internet supply
>> The influence of the internet
recently, internet has affect to us because society has being developed by degrees.
>> Recently, the internet has affected us very much
because society is developing a lot thanks to it.
so internet evoked a lot of benefit and bad affect.
therefore, we have to always awake of these danger and then to use the internet.
>> So the internet created not only merits but also demerits.
Thus, I think we have to be careful and attentive to all the dangerous things from it.
we use internet because of it's useful.
it is true that internet have many function.
>> We use it because it's so useful.
It has many good functions.
it provide us fast transmission of impormation
like knowlege what we didn't know or shopping shop, restaurant.
>> It provides us with quick knowelge of such information as
shopping, eating, chatting and so on.
and at times, when we need to rest, we can play game or chatting.
and if we don't get out, internet serves us as a bank.
>> And when resting, we can enjoy playing games.
but the more developed internet the more came with a bad effect of that.
>> But the better the internet improves,
the worse its bad points become.
..............
학생께서 어떤 이유로 영작을 행하시든
스스로 한번 더 살펴보고
삼고초려 해본 후에 올리시길
라 울 선 생
[출처] 제가 영어로 쓴것 고쳐주세요~ (황인영 영어 카페) |작성자 아벤투라
Raoul Teacher's Writing Support {175}
인터넷보급에의한 영향을 주제로 쓴 수필이라고 하겠는데.....
그냥 생각대로쓴거라서 막 틀렸을꺼에요 ...
틀린이유를 꼭 써주셨으면 합니다.!
influence of internet supply
>> The influence of the internet
recently, internet has affect to us because society has being developed by degrees.
>> Recently, the internet has affected us very much
because society is developing a lot thanks to it.
so internet evoked a lot of benefit and bad affect.
therefore, we have to always awake of these danger and then to use the internet.
>> So the internet created not only merits but also demerits.
Thus, I think we have to be careful and attentive to all the dangerous things from it.
we use internet because of it's useful.
it is true that internet have many function.
>> We use it because it's so useful.
It has many good functions.
it provide us fast transmission of impormation
like knowlege what we didn't know or shopping shop, restaurant.
>> It provides us with quick knowelge of such information as
shopping, eating, chatting and so on.
and at times, when we need to rest, we can play game or chatting.
and if we don't get out, internet serves us as a bank.
>> And when resting, we can enjoy playing games.
but the more developed internet the more came with a bad effect of that.
>> But the better the internet improves,
the worse its bad points become.
..............
학생께서 어떤 이유로 영작을 행하시든
스스로 한번 더 살펴보고
삼고초려 해본 후에 올리시길
라 울 선 생
[출처] 제가 영어로 쓴것 고쳐주세요~ (황인영 영어 카페) |작성자 아벤투라
