I will talk about my dream.
My dream is a doctor, especially dentist.
>>> My dream is to be a doctor, so called dentist.
When I was 9, I pulled out my under front teeth.
>> When I was nine, I had an experience of pulling out one of my front teeth on the down side.
It was my first experience , so I was really nervous and scared.
But dentist talked kindly and set me at ease.
>> 끝을 made my heart free로
so it finished fine.
And then he gave me a present
which is my two teeth with silicon.
I still have it, and it was my valuable memory.
At that time I saw him I think dentist is good and wonderful job.
>> From that time I saw him, I have always thought that dentist is great.
Growing up, I know dentist is hard job.
In fact, be a doctor is really really difficult and hard.
>> be를 to be로
It's not easy to enter medical school.
If you get into there, a lot of study and many tests are waiting for you.
However go through that course and be a dentist, you live meaningful life and proud yourself,
>> However, after going through those hard courses and becoming a dentist, you will live a meaning ful life and take pride in yourself.
To be a dentist I study very hard from now and make an effort.
>> I study를 I am studying으로
You know what they say "No pain, no gain."
if I study hard, I believe something is come to me.
>> come을 coming으로
I will certainly realize my dream and I will be a good dentist for children
so children don't scared but like me.
>> so childeren patients can't be scare like I was before.
Of course I earn a lots of money so I donate for poor people.
Thank you for your attention.
>> And I can make a good living from my job, and donate some to help the people in need.
Thanks for your time.
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