[스크랩] Raoul Teacher`s Writing Support {28}

1. Tell me about an important news story that happened within the last year. Make sure to use your past verb forms correctly.

Cheonan warship is a Korean warship.

>>과거형을 써라 했으므로 is를 was로 

 

On March 16, unfortunately, Cheonan warship sunk in waters with 46 people inside. Most of the missing soldiers are

>> sunk를 sank로

 

around my age.

The fact hurts my heart.

>>hurts > hurt

 

Also, as a evidence that the incident of Choenan is caused by North Korea has been found,

>> as a evidence that을 with the evidence that으로 ...is caused를 was caused로

 

 people are getting fear for war. I hope a settlement for this matter to be reached as soon as possible.

>> Most Koreans were afariad of a war.

I wish this provelen will solve soon. 

 

 

2.would you rather move to tokyo or newyorkcity. why?

I would rather move to Tokyo because it is one of the popular places in the world and a very beautiful city (which) urbane

>> urbane을 urban으로

 

and traditional mood coexist.

 And I was interested  Japanese cultures and customs from childhood,

>> And I was interested in the culture and customs of Japan.

 

so I want to visit japan all the while.  I like Newyork city, too. But I like the unique mood of Tokyo more.

>> So, I really wanted to visit Japan.

>> Tokyo is more unique and beautiful than Newyork to me.  

 

 

3.what kind of work does a policeman have to do? explain what a policeman's job is like.

I think that the police should protect the people, and prevent and solve crimes, and preserve the order of society. Therefore, it is a very important job, which is necessary to our society. Without the police, our society will be chaotic.

  

>> To procet the innocent citizens is a majot job of the policemen. Their job is to keep the citizens from being harmed from criminals.

 

4.what kind of fashion style do you like? what does your fashion style say about you?

There are many individual fashions in the world. I think vintage is among the best fashion style. And vintage style is one of the latest fashion style. So, I usually wear vintage style because it is not just an old fashion but a mixture of old and new and makes me possible to express myself in so many and liberal ways. Also, I'm interested in matching these clothes.

 

>> I like vintage style. It is a style that has been in recently, and is can represent my own style, so free and active.

 

5.if you were given the chance to start your own business. what kind of business would you open? explain why this business is special to you

If I launch a business, I want to do cosmetic sales because I am so interested in cosmetics and have lots of information. Because  the business, which import!s and sells unknown cosmetic brands to the domestic market giving them cosmetic information, is the one that I like and think I can do well, so it is special to me.

 

>> the one이하를 the one I like and am good at으로 수정

 

6.do you agree or disagree that it is more fun to be single than to be married? explain.

I agree  that. Because a person who's single isn't curbed and has freedom, and can spend time only for him/herself and also free from the problems caused by marriage such as, especially for Korean women, troubles living with her parents-in-law. Therefore, I think single life is more pleased than married life.

 

>> I agree that의 that생략. especiallt for Korean women생략. 끝 문장 I think being single is more comfortable and convenient than being married로 수정

 

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짧고 간결하게, 그리고 분명히 하십시오.

 

 

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